Hello, I am SaevusWinds,from <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/w/r/w…" alt="" title="Writers--club"/> and I will be your critic from for this poem.

This poem packs so much emotion and feeling. I can tell this is a very personal topic, I could feel it as I read the words. Great job conveying the mood. It managed to show another, yet even sadder aspect of the topic. The sentence structure and flow might be a little choppy, but I don't think it takes away from the poem to much. Maybe if you felt up to it, you could expand it a little more, maybe throwing in some literary devices. I love the ending, I think a call to action is quite a nice finishing note. It shows that there is still hope. Fabulous.